tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5931992770727039248.post5784921125016909186..comments2023-04-02T02:33:42.308-07:00Comments on Life of Ky: Why Inception was amazingAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05853838560160444794noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5931992770727039248.post-8819386316223036872010-07-31T00:55:45.887-07:002010-07-31T00:55:45.887-07:00Well I did just write a whole load of opinion here...Well I did just write a <i>whole load</i> of opinion here for you but then I went to process it and Google returned errors and I lost it all. But seeing as I can't be bothered to write it out again, I'll tell you next time I see you! xxEdward Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09637587378401967338noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5931992770727039248.post-65104488561829317322010-07-31T00:54:01.458-07:002010-07-31T00:54:01.458-07:00Hey K, just thought I'd offer my comments :) b...Hey K, just thought I'd offer my comments :) be warned that I'm going to be over-critical! You know I think your writing style is good anyway so I'm only going to offer the bad points of this one so don't be offended!<br /><br />You avoided describing the plot by saying it sounded gushy. At least try to describe it, no matter how confusing it sounds.<br /><br />Your opinion was offered straight from the start. Perhaps give a hint to your opinion in the blog title, then start by describing the history of the film (perhaps mention more films of the same genre - like you said, 'The Matrix'). Then move onto the plotline while offering a more balanced argument. Then obviously once you conclude you can offer as much opinion as you like!<br /><br />The impression I got from the outset was that you were going to fall on one side of the argument, and when I read reviews I like to almost want to work out if I think it's going to be a good or bad review <i>before</i> the start.<br /><br />I was left wondering when Leonado DiCaprio was going to be mentioned. You mentioned two of his colleagues before the lead actor.<br /><br />Why don't you like Ellen Page? This is left unclear. Is it a personal hate, or for a reason? How does she improve in this film?<br /><br />Finally, this one has nothing to do with your writing style but your writing media. If you are writing on the internet you need to try and put more links into the text. For example there was a section above where you could have linked to your previous blog about dreams. The reader doesn't want to flick back and forward, they want it put there easily for them! If you look at Wikipedia you'll notice that almost every other word is linked for ease of access.<br /><br />To add links into the text, (for example to your 'Dreams' blog) just add <a href="http://ravesrantsandrandomramblings.blogspot.com/2010/07/why-you-shouldnt-blog-about-dreams-with.html">Dreams.</a>. Basically just add more of those and you'll be equipped for writing on the internet. If you need anymore help with it, feel free to ask - it's my job!<br /><br />I guess doing magazine journalism, however, you will be no doubt be appealing to a different target audience than me, so feel free to argue back on any of the above :) xxEdward Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09637587378401967338noreply@blogger.com